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SAT写作真题批改实例讲解参考

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SAT学生习作修改:Is it necessary to question the authority?

SAT写作真题批改实例讲解参考

分析:本文是2006年10月考题,先根据题目做思维练习。

本文作者写的是黑人争夺民权,就此考虑文章中要细化的内容。

Authority--- who? 本文是the white people

Question the authority--- why? (因为白人欺负黑人太甚了) How? (开会,选领导,搞抗议)

Result ---(废除了公共汽车法)

学生文章分析

开头段:

1Every person makes mistakes, as well as the authority. 2Thats why it is important to insist your own idea when authority is wrong. 3Development of peoples society is usually associated with challenging the authority.

问题:句一太松散;句二词组误用,缺定冠词;句三和句二之间有些跳跃,意思上理解应该是挑战权威的结果;首段缺少明确的`观点和对下文的提示。

修改:1 I cannot agree more with the saying, 2for the authority, like common people, are likely to make mistakes or act unreasonably on some occasions. 3At that moment, the public is supposed to, at the risk of offending the authority, insist on his own belief for the further development of the society. 4Next I will take the example of __Rosa Park_____ to illustrate/substantiate my point.