Talk about myself
My name is zhangPing fifteen years old. I live in BeiJing. One of my favorite subjects is biology. I am interested in drawing . In my free time, I often go camping, draw some picturesof plants, enjoy the songs of birds in nature. I want to be a biologist when I grow up .I am outgoing and like talking to d you like to make friends with me ? If we can be friends, I will be very glad
1.“picturesof”應改為.“pictures of”
2.文章結尾略顯不暢通,建議再寫出你交友的要求標準聯繫方式較好。例如:I like making friends who are outgoing like me,Would you like to be my friend? If you’d like to,please call me at …. I will be very glad.
3.“…picturesof plants, enjoy the …”改為.“…picturesof plants and enjoy the …”注意並列結構最後一個成分常用and 連接。